Van Likiaro

dear god i fit it on one post, the world must be ending.

and now divs gone i can rp with L's model correctly. ;|

Yeah, I was going to say - Looks like Div.

Maybe it's just me, but the bio seems bland. "He gained a natural strength"? People train to get strong, they aren't just born with it. And he learned sword fighting from some guy's dad. Seems kinda random.

I think if you toned down the sheer volume of characters you're putting out, they might come out better and more detailed. Clearly you like the creation process, so why not take more time with it and savor the creation of a really good character?

Munroe wrote:

"He gained a natural strength"? People train to get strong, they aren't just born with it.

And he learned sword fighting from some guy's dad. Seems kinda random.

I think if you toned down the sheer volume of characters you're putting out, they might come out better and more detailed.

Clearly you like the creation process, so why not take more time with it and savor the creation of a really good character?

He still has alot of physical endurance from his youth, so he can fight normaly for long periods of time. By 'awkward and ridiculous situations', I mean his Grandfather got into fights and arguments all the time over stupid and nonsensical things on a regular basis, though he couldn't end them himself (Van enters here, fixes problem by fighting them or working out the situation).

Not really. When his guardians died, he needed someone to take him in for a while (He couldn't keep the home, never-the-less provide for himself to well), and since he had only a few good friends, he was lucky that said friends parents were fine with him living with them. The friends father just thought that it would be better if both the boys knew how to swordfight (His son had already been training, but wasn't so good by himself, since his father would nag at him all the time, depraving him of any bit of fun), in case it came to a situation where they would need it. It worked out well for both the boys, since they could joke around alot more.

Firstly, Van is a character I had before I left, previously, I just rewrote some of his stuff so it wouldn't be in all caps, Like This, I Don't Do It Like This Anymore, and because I personally think that Div was being sort of retarded when he was using L as a model for Marcus, possibly ruining the image for some of you of Death Note (Live Action is truly better, Novels, also). Second, You can tell the difference between a character I create because of the picture/story, and the characters I create, that are very detailed, have long, long paragraphs, ect. The latter are born directly from my ideas and thoughts, unlike the before-hand, so they are more individual and complex.

Stated as above, it depends on what kind of thing sparks the idea of the character that will change if it is good or not. Though that doesn't matter really. I could have a really, crappy, boring page for a character, and roleplay them as I think they would be, which would be much, MUCH better (I get very serious when roleplaying a character, I do 'become' them, unconciously, most of the time).

See? Div ruined L's image.

L Div is a faggot.

Period

Elaborate more of the character with the bio, it's a bit short, it makes the character feel empty, know what I'm saying?
Emo fashion doesn't exist in olden.
If it does, then I guess we also have cyborgs with jetpacks who have machine guns for arms and laser pisto-- ...oh wait.

Otherwise, Nice character, improve the bio and I'll accept.