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PostSubject: Thran Khar   Sat Mar 26, 2011 7:57 am


Name: Thran Khar

Age: 23

Gender: Male

Race: Human

Backstory
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Physical Description
Thran has long, unkept hair down to his shoulders and a small beard, his eyes are a light blue and his face has small but noticeable scars on it. He wears leather armor on almost his entire body and a sheated sword can be seen on a belt, he stands at about "6'1 and has an average looking build.

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True Neutral -Thran has developed a strong uncaring for people he dosent know, though he will still try to make friends and will at rare times help those in need.

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Attributes

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Inventory


x1 Iron Longsword
x1 Iron Hatchet
x18 Gold pieces
Small amounts of various food
x1 Water Skin
x1 Leather Cuirass
x1 Pair of Leather gloves
x1 Pair of Leather boots
x1 Leather Greeves

Deity

Perskel Kanza, the person the Kanza tribe was named after, worshipped as their guide and founder aswell as a symbol of unity within what was once the tribe

OOC Note:
Yeah....thought i'd try and rejoin Aeria with a new character, just say if i need to change anything or tone anything down, This is the first backstory/character app ive made in awhile.


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PostSubject: Re: Thran Khar   Sat Mar 26, 2011 8:02 am

Great picture, nice theme and backstory, nothing to really complain of the attributes or abilities, nor inventory...

Go ahead.

Now to wait until he does something and someone yells "KHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAR!"

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PostSubject: Re: Thran Khar   Sat Mar 26, 2011 11:11 am

Maybe shaving a point off one handed swords would be nice, he's awfully close to a mastery, but besides that, I'm willing to accept this.
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PostSubject: Re: Thran Khar   Sat Mar 26, 2011 11:52 am

I like this. Accepted.
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PostSubject: Re: Thran Khar   Sat Mar 26, 2011 12:12 pm

Cup of coffee in my hand, idly watching TV, a lack of much else to do for a few hours, you sir gain the honour of a full Phry character assesment c:

Decent themesong.

Pretty good picture - can appreciate how hard it is to find good ones these days, having had to find one recently myself.

Backstory is consistent, mostly. Suitably long and detailed.

The name is quite original too, that should be appreciated, very barbarian sounding my respec.

Hm, now, the skills. I agree with Xeloras, the one-handed sword skill is rather high.

My advice is to just remove the axe and single-sword skills and keep the beserker style two-weapon skill as it is.

You'd probably find that a barbarian tribe such as his would worship some kind of minor warrior diety.

Other than that, it looks good, though i'd strongly reccomend taking the course of action I suggested regarding the skills and maybe adding a diety born of your imagination.
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PostSubject: Re: Thran Khar   Sat Mar 26, 2011 12:29 pm

EDIT:

Following your advice i took a point off Swords, though i'd like to keep the individual weapon skills there.
As for a Deity... I hope it dosent too badly affect my character but i just dont think he should have one.
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PostSubject: Re: Thran Khar   Sat Mar 26, 2011 12:37 pm

It's just that, worshipping a diety has actual rewards in this universe, so to be an atheist you ususally have to hate the gods for some reason, be ignorant to their existance, or feel it to be mainstream. Or something along those lines.
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PostSubject: Re: Thran Khar   Sat Mar 26, 2011 12:51 pm

Uh, i dont know if making a second edit post is frowned upon. I guess you have a point Phry, i gave his tribe a deity.
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PostSubject: Re: Thran Khar   Sat Mar 26, 2011 12:54 pm

On the contrary, it's encouraged.
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PostSubject: Re: Thran Khar   Sat Mar 26, 2011 4:19 pm

I think posting on a character approval page simply to grade Phry's post, without giving your opinion on the character itself earns you an F- Mack.
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PostSubject: Re: Thran Khar   Sat Mar 26, 2011 4:22 pm

Col Awesome wrote:
I think posting on a character approval page simply to grade Phry's post, without giving your opinion on the character itself earns you an F- Mack.

But it's his job.

Also I don't realy see anything wrong with this so Go for it
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PostSubject: Re: Thran Khar   Sat Mar 26, 2011 4:39 pm

Col Awesome wrote:
I think posting on a character approval page simply to grade Phry's post, without giving your opinion on the character itself earns you an F- Mack.


i was actually planning on posting my approval after someone replied, BUT SINCE YOU HAVE NOW GIVEN ME AN F, I AM REFUSING TO DO SO.
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PostSubject: Re: Thran Khar   Sun Mar 27, 2011 5:25 am

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the honour of a full Phry character assesment

haha oh wow

Yeah this isn't too bad at all. I'm indifferent on the sword skill- I suppose anyone's got to have a strength and why wouldn't a warrior be good with the sword?
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